Almost captivated then almost captivated.
The beginning gives me a chill. It was fantastic start with occasional pauses and stresses. However, as the song progresses, I kind of lose the tension of the melody. It becomes more and more predictable with drum loop and constant tabular bell. I'm not saying that using them is bad though, it just sounds quite overused in classical. :)
Nice breakdown in the middle part of the song. Give out a decent room for rest, then BAM! comes in with epic piano.
Towards the end of the song is my favorite part of the whole piece. It has more diversity and imagery than the first part. I feel more compelled to imagine clearer story. Personally, I'd recommend you to make the ending more dramatic by adding strong percussion in constant downbeat, like timpani or bass drum along with cymbal. That'd certainly make the ending so epic to me.
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